Peer Editing Feedback -siri ware
1. What are some areas that could use more detail? Why?
I think some of the areas that could use some more detail is just the overall benefit to reading in the summer
2. What additional sources might the author use? Does the lead involve you in the story?
yes it does and aditional sources include teachers and librarians
3. Does the story contain a well defined scene (a detailed description of someone doing something or something happening)? What is it? If not, make a suggestion for a scene that might work.
the interviews and the details behind the books
4. What would you like to see or hear more of? Less of? Include, any other suggestions you have for improvement. I would love to hear abut some of the book that kids dont always hear about mabey even go to a barnes and noble and aks them what they recommend




Peer Editing Feedback -sonja burke

1. What are some areas that could use more detail? Why?
What kids could do in summer if they have work like fun places to work in the summer
2. What additional sources might the author use? Does the lead involve you in the story?
what teachers are doing for the summer
3. Does the story contain a well defined scene (a detailed description of someone doing something or something happening)? What is it? If not, make a suggestion for a scene that might work.
all the events for summer
4. What would you like to see or hear more of? Less of? Include, any other suggestions you have for improvement. I would like t hear more of kids that are going to other countries or doing something out of the norm for summer